2017托福写作范文《明星商人变领导》

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2017托福写作范文《明星商人变领导》

　　托福考试的备考，作文是不能忽略的重点。尤其是托福作文经常会与一些社会上的热点话题联系在一起。因此考生在备考时，可多练习一些热点话题的托福写作。下面为大家带来一篇讨论明星商人变领导的2017托福写作范文，供大家参考。

2017托福写作范文《明星商人变领导》

　　Do you agree or disagree: Athletes or celebrities that are from the entertainment business can change their careers to be politicians.

　　Each person has his or her unique characteristics that are suitable to certain particular fields. If people can work in the field their interest and talents lie in, they can certainly contribute more to the society as well as the world. As Dmitri Mendeleev, the founder of periodical table, once put, “Enthusiasm is key to all success.” Thus, whoever the person is, an athlete, or a celebrity from the entertainment business, as long as they desire to divert their field, they can surely succeed with the profession change

　　Firstly, athletes and entertainment celebrities know more about people than the average. For politics, it is all about people and the needs of them viewed in a whole picture. Athletes and entertainment celebrities have had more chances of meeting people from all walks of life in the profession. In order to reach fame, those famous people needed to know more people and meet more people for opportunities when they were young. If they change to become a politician, they will know better about what people need who are from various kinds of background. A case in point, for businesspeople, they care more about if their business can be taken care of with the foresight for sustainable management down the road. However, for the average 5 to 9 workers, they pay more attention if the government can bring stability to their life, rather than venturing policies that might make a big difference. Since athletes and entertainment celebrities have known people from a wide range, they can take all reasons and perspectives into consideration and make out the policy that is made compromised to different needs of people. With the understanding of different groups of people, they can alter their profession into politics with success.

　　Secondly, athletes and entertainment celebrities can better tackle with pressure. Learning how to work hard in the completive world, they can endure more pressure than the average and still make great decisions under such condition. For athletes and entertainment celebrities, they need to work so hard to compete with other players or with other new stars in the trade. When they become politicians, they also need to endure tremendous stress and need to still work with it with a sane mind. Those public figures have had such training, so when they change to be a politician, they can better cope with the problems from the public. For example, politicians are often questioned by the public in their private life, they need to deal with opinions opposing to theirs with grace, not with anger or hatred. “A friend gained is better than an enemy added.” In addition, everyone has the liberty to change their occupation. We are living in a free world where people are protected by law to do whatever they desire, granting they are not violating the law. For sure changing occupation fields is not illegal. If they can win the heart of the voters, it means that they have pondered over what responsibility they are about to assume. It is not about the charming appearance or excellent performance in the court, but the ability to take the pressure and serve the public.

　　Admittedly, some people may maintain the viewpoint that it is not a wise decision for those athletes or entertainment celebrities to change to become politicians. For example, in the entertainment world, their jobs are to entertain people from different backgrounds. Yet for a politician, he or she cannot satisfy all the people because a great politician needs to have vision for the future and the public sometimes only see their benefits as the most important; however “such importance” is not advantageous to a long term development, such as road construction, building up schools or having to pay more tax on the transportation.However, once an athletes or a star from the show business can successfully change to the political world, it means they are ready and voters are approving. They might not know the secret of being successful, yet they do know the secret of being failing, that is-trying to please everybody—. Hence, when those public figures long to change their profession, they can do that successfully owing to the fact that they have met and known more people in their life and that they can deal with pressure better.

　　附：托福写作点拨：Main body论证切勿蜻蜓点水，泛泛而谈。具象的叙事和贴近的例子可以帮你加分。

　　这个我就不多说了，大家都明白的，每个人都知道这条，但还是有很多人做不好。直接上意见。

　　[屁股]的意见：

　　1)谈栗子的时候，如果叙事，适当给一坨屎放出“这是真的例子”的信号。因为一般大家懂得，栗子有时候会胡编乱造。to make more genuine，我们需要加上一些佐料：谈书，我们可以讲作者、书名;谈事情，我们可以给出具体那个时间，是两年前的夏天，还是上周二，描述一下那天的天气等等;叙述人，讲出具体的名字、身份，他的家乡。这些都不是强制需要的东西，可是，谎圆的越全，会显得栗子更加生动，人物跃然纸上。More details，more credit。

　　2)不要在一段里面重复叠加很多例子，构成排比。我建议排比尽量出现在开头结尾，用在中间是下下策，会让ETS觉得你没例子可写，瞎凑自述。一段最多详述一个例子，略举另一个例子。

　　3)每段段尾点个题，大家都懂得。例子扯远了有时候自己都不知道自己在说什么，为了避免跑题的嫌疑，最后给个简单的In this way, the story tells us.(烂例子again)当然!也不要每段都是那么一句。它只适合放在合适的位置。

　　4)如果你为没有足够的素材而烦恼，我可以告诉你，不需要特别丰富的素材，我就没有。从你身边的例子开始想起。如果你真的需要名人名言。那么找1、2个经历丰富，美国人熟知的名人来了解其生平。或者语录。啥主题的议论文都可以往上套。比如我的是Abraham Lincoln。

　　5)我建议一共三段main body，两个正面论证，一个反面论证。这样就体现了你思维的严谨性、丰富性，不会产生太多审美疲劳。

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