GMAT考试作文点评分析

相关推荐

GMAT考试作文点评分析

　　知道错在哪里，下次才能改正。以下百分网小编整理的GMAT考试作文点评分析，希望对大家有所帮助，更多信息请关注应届毕业生网!

GMAT考试作文点评分析

　　原题：

　　The following appeared as part of an annual report sent to stockholders by Olympic Foods, a processor of frozen foods:

　　“Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. The same principle applies to the processing of food. And since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its 25th birthday, we can expect that our long experience will enable us to minimize costs and thus maximize profits.”

　　逻辑漏洞：

　　1. false analogy: The food industry is not analogous to the color film industry.

　　2.causal oversimplification: Other factors that may contribute t to the cost decline of the printing cost should be considered and ruled out.

　　3.gratuitous assumption: The conclusion of the argument is based on a gratuitous assumption that the company can minimize cost and maximize profit because the company has been conducted for 25 years.

　　范文：

　　The author assumes that since organizations engaged in color-film processing were able to increase efficiency and cut-down costs over a period of 25 years; same must be true of Olympic Foods, which is about to celebrate its 25th anniversary. The arguments is based on questionable assumptions and weak analogies and appears to be a result of a hasty generalization.

　　The main problem with the author’s reasoning is the weak analogy he develops between the two “processing” industries. One fails to see any logical connection between the two and the author makes no effort to show the connection either. The two industries are too dissimilar to be compared. For example: frozen food industry faces problem of storage, transportation, contamination etc; no similar problems are observed in the film-processing industry. Even the markets for the two differ widely. The argument could have been strong if the author could show the missing connection or if he had compared the frozen-food industry with a similar industry.

　　Also the author fails to recognize that it’s not the number of years of experience that matters; what actually matters is what is learnt over all those years.

　　An industry may mature over a couple of years, yet another may remain stagnant even after 25 years. The color-film industry people may have tremendous learnings that may have contributed to the cost-reduction; but the report shows no evidence of Olympic Foods doing the same.

　　GMAT作文建议1.文章的长度

　　大多数人的做法：“AWA写作没有要求长度或者字数。所以要写作重要是简洁，一般两段为佳。”

　　破解误区：这样的做法会为你的写作减分。即使AWA写作没有规定明确的字数，但是据统计GMAT考试，大多数的高分essay还是集中在文章400+词。这里需要说明，较长的essay会被认为你的写作针对某一issue or argument是比较全面和有独到的见解。

　　Tip：所以最佳作品建议：400-430 words

　　GMAT作文建议2.文章的写作思路

　　大多数人的做法：“我不想写的太多，只是点到为止。文章的argument都是比较基础的。”

　　破解误区：在AWA的GMAT写作中，无法全面的表达自己的观点或者看法。但是在该段写作结束之前，请先为自己一个问题：“接下来该怎么写?这些内容会对我的thesis有什么帮助?这个点为什么重要?”提醒：写作的目的是为了将你的观点表达的丝丝入扣。所以在练习的时候，请注意你的观点之间的衔接，不要让它被孤立，这样会为你的写作减分的。

　　Tip：注意你的观点或论点前后的衔接，并且保证你每一段的论述大于2 sentences。

　　GMAT作文建议3.清晰的写作目的

　　大多数人的做法：“我知道字数应该在400+，但是我对于这个topic不了解。所以只是想到什么就写什么，然后尽量将它们联系起来。”

　　破解误区：如果你对topic没有认识，仅仅只是跟着自己想到得内容，随便写。不可否认，有时候源自于潜意识的观点也是不错的。但是，与此相伴出现的问题是：你无法就给定的subject进行深入且谨慎的讨论。然而文章严谨的结构却是写作不可缺少的。PS：这里写作时考你的分析能力，而不是你就某一个问题的了解程度(即，你的知识储备)。

　　Tips：更多的注重你的argument，而不是某一个例子本身。如果对某一些题目不熟悉的话，建议看看英文类的杂志。

　　GMAT作文建议4. 你的论点

　　大多数人的做法：“我对这个问题没有什么看法，它看起来太复杂了。我只是叙述了它的观点，而没有就某一个观点做特别的论证。”

　　破解误区：这样的做法只是会让你的essay减分。在写作的时候，你需要明确你就某一问题或观点的看法，这样会使你的文章重心突出。注意在写作时，不要把你的论点当成一个问题，又抛给你的读者，而是要清晰的表达你的观点。

　　Tips：如果你无法就某一argument or issue确定你的观点，请重新审视题目，对其中的提示性语言做出一个outline。不断的练习，将是你在这一方面取得长足的进步。

　　GMAT作文建议5.合适的用例，为你添彩

　　大多数人的做法：“我知道的不多，所以并没有使用具体例子说明。”

　　破解误区：尽管GMAT考试不会考察你的business, history, 和时事的了解程度，但是你还需要有一定程度的了解。否则，面对topic，也许你会哑口无言。

　　Tips：你可以在你的AWA写作时，运用很多例子，关于history、current events、literature、your personal life、your work experience。建议阅读：The Economist, The Wall Street Journal, or Business week。

　　Another point that the author misses completely is that there may be factors other than just the expertise and experience gained over the mentioned period. For example: developments in technology may have resulted in the cost-reduction for the color-film processing industry. The author could have strengthened his stand by showing that it’s merely the increased efficiency that has brought costs down. He could have also chosen to highlight similar developments in the food-processing industry too.

　　To sum, the author’s conclusion doesn’t appear to be convincing at all. The author could have made it a bit persuasive by presenting the evidence mentioned above. Without these, the argument is weak and fails to impress the reader.

【GMAT考试作文点评分析】相关文章：

GMAT考试复议流程分析10-10

2015年GMAT考试数学复习经验分析09-26

GMAT考试语法点分析之主动代替被动06-24

GMAT考试详解05-29