盈余四级作文点评

　　Part Ⅰ Writing (30 minutes)

盈余四级作文点评

　　注意：此部分试题在答题卡1上。

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Students Selecting Their Lecturers. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below:

　　1.有些大学允许学生自由选择某些课程的任课教师

　　2.学生选择教师时所考虑的主要因素

　　3.学生自选任课教师的益处和可能产生的问题

　　Students Selecting Their Lecturers

　　大学英语四级考试2006年6月真题精读笔记

　　一、审题谋篇

　　就体裁来说，本次四级作文为议论文，话题是关于学生自由选择某些课程的任课教师，属于校园类话题。

　　根据提示信息可以判断本文为提纲式作文，据此可以把文章分为三段。首段介绍文章的主题“Some universities give students freedom to choose their own lecturers for some courses”。第二段进行事实说明，分析学生选择老师可能考虑的因素：教学风格(teaching style)、学术水平（academics）、个性（personality）、作业要求（assignments）等。由于篇幅有限，考生不能一一列举。应从中选取比较有代表性的、易于表达的，使用firstly，secondly…等词进行逻辑组织。第三段是结论段，从事情的两面性指出其positive and negative effects。

　　写作时，要选择适当的角度，最好使用第三人称进行论述，这样会让文章读起来更加客观，观点更容易被接受。

　　二、参考范文

　　Students Selecting Their Lecturers

　　An increasing number of universities are undertaking some changes by giving their students freedom to choose their own lecturers for some courses. This practice, ever since it comes out, has been very popular with students.

　　There are several factors influencing students’ choice of the lecturers. Firstly, an ideal lecturer should have an interesting and humorous teaching style, so that students can learn their subjects in a relaxed and pleasant atmosphere. Secondly, a diverse academic background is also preferred since a knowledgeable teacher can greatly enlarge students’ scope of knowledge. Last but not least, a teacher with an agreeable personality is also desirable to students.

　　This practice undoubtedly has lots of positive effects on the present college education, as it can encourage students to take an active part in study and urges teachers to improve their teaching quality. However, it can inevitably bring some negative effects. For instance, some teachers may try to cater to the students’ interest to increase the popularity of their lessons, while ignoring the teaching plan, which may lead to the opposite direction of high education quality.

　　越来越多的大学允许学生自由选择某些课程的任课教师。这一举措，自施行之日起，就深受同学们的欢迎。

　　有几个因素会影响到学生对老师的选择。首先，理想的教师应该具有风趣幽默的`教学风格，为学生创造一种轻松舒适的学习环境。其次，教师知识多样化也会得到学生的喜爱，因为一个学识渊博的教师会极大地影响学生的知识范围。最后但同样重要的是教师平易近人的个性，这在学生选择教师时也是颇具吸引力的。

　　该举措的实施无疑对当前的大学教育产生了很多积极的影响。一方面，它鼓励学生对学习采取更加积极的态度；另一方面，也会促使教师更好地改进自己的教学。然而，它不可避免地也会有诸多负面影响。例如，教师有可能只顾迎合学生的要求而忽视教学计划，从而背离高质量大学教育的目标。

　　三、范文点评

　　对题材的成功挖掘是写出好文章的前提。文章第二段具体选择了三种比较全面并具有代表性的原因。这样一来，段落层次分明又符合逻辑，是很成功的构思。文章最后一段正反两方面的论述也颇有深度。语言表述简练，没有语言错误。形容词、动词的选择多样化，富有变化。

　　【生动的用词】

　　undertake 实行；ideal 理想的；diverse 多样的；prefer 喜欢；agreeable 平易近人的；desirable 渴望得到的；undoubtedly 毫无疑问；inevitably 毋庸置疑

　　【丰富的短语】

　　cater to 满足；lead to 导致；be popular with 受欢迎；have effects on 对……有影响

　　【多变的句式】

　　本文行文过程中尝试着变换不同的句式，让文章读起来不那么枯燥。多种时态交叉使用，使作者思想清晰明了。如：“Firstly, an ideal lecturer should have an interesting and humorous teaching style, so that students can learn their subjects in a relaxed and pleasant atmosphere. Secondly, a diverse academic background is also preferred since a knowledgeable teacher can greatly enlarge students’ scope of knowledge.”逻辑性强，语言功底深，为文章增添了亮点。

　　借助逻辑关联词，如since，as，however等，以及顺序关联词，如firstly，secondly，last but not least等，可使论述连贯，思路清晰易懂。文中最后一句是非限定性定语从句 “which may lead to the opposite direction of high education quality”，它的使用突出了作者鲜明的态度，且言简意赅，紧扣提纲。

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