用复合句增强句子之间的逻辑关系使你的句子变得紧凑，改写句子填入适当的词使句意与原句意义相同，有效地使用了语句间的连接成分使全文结构紧凑，原文并没有明显的语法错误但读上去不够简洁显得罗嗦。
如何写出好句子
如何写出好句子
如何写出好句子：好句子的标准应是：用词准确、逻辑清晰、简洁明了、可读性强。
1.学会运用复合句
复合句包括：名词性从句、状语从句、定语从句
用复合句增强句子之间的逻辑关系，使你的句子变得紧凑
［练习］
根据句子之间的关系，用正确的连词使其成为复合句。
（1）Childrengrowolder.Theyprefertobemoreindependentratherthanbeatthemercyoftheirparents.
Whenchildrengrowolder,theyprefertobemoreindependentratherthanbeatthemercyoftheirparents.
（2）Iwasveryexcited.Icouldn’texpremyselfinwords.
IwassoexcitedthatIcouldn’texpremyselfinwords.
（3）Wewillhaveafurtherdiscussion.Wedrawafinalconclusion.
Wewillhaveafurtherdiscussionbeforewedrawafinalconclusion.
（4）Theeconomyinthisareaisdevelopingrapidly.Thequalitiesofsomecitizensarestillnotsatisfactory.
Althoughtheeconomyinthisareaisdevelopingrapidly,thequalitiesofsomecitizensarestillnotsatisfactory.
（5）Youareallowedtodrivemycar.Youshoulddrivecarefullyandslowly.
Youareallowedtodrivemycaronconditionthat/aslongasyoushoulddrivecarefullyandslowly.
（6）Theteacherhadreadmycomposition.Hegavemehisopinion.
Aftertheteacherhadreadmycomposition,hegavemehisopinion.
（7）Youhavegotthesecret.Pleasedon’tspreaditinpublic.
Ifyouhavegotthesecret,pleasedon’tspreaditinpublic.
（8）Theyarrivedatthefarm.Theywerewelcomedbythefarmers.
Themoment/Assoonastheyarrivedatthefarm,theywerewelcomedbythefarmers.
（9）TheInternationalRedCroisanorganization.Itspurposeistohelpthesickandtheneedy.TheInternationalRedCroisanorganizationwhosepurposeistohelpthesickandtheneedy.
（10）Idecidedtofindajob.Icouldearnthemoney.
IdecidedtofindajobsothatIcouldearnthemoney.
2.学会运用非谓语动词
用非谓语动词使你的句子简洁。
［练习］
运用非谓语动词完成下列句子：
（1）MostoftheartistswhohadbeeninvitedtothepartywerefromSouthAfrica.
MostoftheartistsinvitedtothepartywerefromSouthAfrica.
（2）Thepricesofthecomputerswhicharebeingshownherearestillunknown.
Thepricesofthecomputersbeingshownherearestillunknown.
（3）Afterhehadbeendesertedbyhisguide,hecouldn’tfindhiswaythroughthejungle.
Havingbeendesertedbyhisguide,hecouldn’tfindhiswaythroughthejungle.
（4）Nowadaystheoldpeopleoftendomorningexercisesintheparkinorderthattheycouldkeephealthy.
Nowadaystheoldpeopleoftendomorningexercisesintheparktokeephealthy.
（5）Thechurchwasbuiltin1829.ItistheoldestEuropeanstructure.
Thechurchbuiltin1829istheoldestEuropeanstructure.
（6）Janewasdisturbedbythenoise.Sheturnedofftheradio.
Disturbedbythenoise,Janeturnedofftheradio.
（7）Garywastired.Hedecidedtogotobed.
Beingtired,Garydecidedtogotobed.
（8）AsIfelthungry,Idecidedtowalktotheshopandbuysomefood.
Feelinghungry,Idecidedtowalktotheshopandbuysomefood.
（9）Isenthimane-mailandhopedtogetfurtherinformationaboutSARS.
Isenthimane-mail,hopingtogetfurtherinformationaboutSARS.
（10）AssoonasIenteredtheclassroom,IfoundallmyclassmateswerebusystudyingEnteringtheclassroom,Ifoundallmyclassmateswerebusystudying
3.学会句式的变化
用不同的表达方法来丰富你的句式
［练习］
改写句子，填入适当的词使句意与原句意义相同。
1.Itwasnotlongbeforehehadtoleaveforanotherplace.
Beforelong,hewasforcedtomoveon.
2.Theroomissosmallthatwecan’tputthepianoinit.
Theroomistoosmallforustoputthepianoin.
3.BychanceImetanoldfriendofminethatday.
Ihappenedtomeetanoldfriendofminethatday.
IthappenedthatImetanoldfriendofminethatday.
4.Thatwasbecausewewerenotcarefulenough.
Thatwasbecauseofourcarelessness.
5.Thepeoplewereindeepsorrowwhentheyheardthissadnews.
Thepeoplewereindeepsorrowatthissadnews.
6.Ifyouwon’tdoit,I’llgetTomtodoit.
Ifyouwon’tdoit,I’llmake/haveTomdoit.
7.Wethinkthatitisourdutytotakecareoftheseyoungtrees.
Wethinkitourdutytotakecareoftheseyoungtrees.
8.WhenIwasachild,Ioftenplayedhere.
Asaboy,Iusedtoplayhere.
9.Ihaveneverseensuchabeautifulsuitbefore.
Ihaveneverseensobeautifulasuitbefore.
10.Ifitdoesn’train,we’llholdthesportsmeet.
Unleitrains,we’llholdthesportsmeet.
11.DoyoumindifIsmokehere?
Doyoumindmy/mesmokinghere?
12.IwaswalkingaimlesslythroughthestreetwhenIsawatailor’sshop.
IwaswanderingthroughthestreetwhenIcaughtsightofatailor’sshop.
13.Hearingthenews,hehurriedhome.
After/Whenheheardthenews,hewenthomeinahurry.
14.Heneverhesitatestohelpothers.
Healwayshelpsotherswithoutanyhesitation.
15.Theyoungmancamein,whowasholdingabookinhishand.
Theyoungmancamein,holding/withabookinhishand.
16.Liberationbroughtaboutacompletechangeinhislife.
Itwasliberationthatbroughtaboutacompletechangeinhislife.
17.Thewindowsneedcleaning.
Thewindowsneedtobecleaned.
18.Idon’tthinkhewillapologizetome.
Idon’tthinkhewillmakeanapologytome.
19.Itseemedthattheyweretalkingaboutsomethingimportant.
Theyseemedtobetalkingaboutsomethingimportant.
20.It’stimeforustodiscuthisproblem.
It’stimethatweshoulddiscuss/discussedthisproblem.
21.You’reverykindtosayso.
It’sverykindofyoutosayso.
22.Theforeignvisitorswerewarmlywelcomedattheairport.
Theforeignvisitorsweregivenawarmwelcomeattheairport.
23.AsIwascoughingbadly,thedoctortoldmetostopsmoking.
Thedoctoradvisedmetogiveupsmoking,forIwascoughingbadly.
24.Withthehelpofthemap,wefoundtheplacewithoutanytrouble.
Withthehelpofthemap,wehadnotroubleinfindingtheplace.
25.AsIwastiredout,Iwenttosleepsoon.
Beingtiredout,Ifellasleepsoon.
26.Itoldhimtogotoschoolandatlasthetookmyadvice.
AtlastIpersuadedhimtogotoschool.
27.PeoplesaidhewouldinviteMr.Browntodinner
ItwassaidthathewouldinviteMr.Browntodinner.
HewassaidtoinviteMr.Browntodinner.
28.Goodpronunciationisveryimportant.
Goodpronunciationisofgreatimportance.
29.IrantoschoolsoquicklythatIcouldhardlybreathewhenIreachedthere.
IrantoschoolsoquicklythatIwasquiteoutofbreathwhenIreachedthere.
30.Ididn’tfinishreadingthenoveluntilyesterday.
ItwasnotuntilyesterdaythatIfinishedreadingthenovel.
NotuntilyesterdaydidIfinishreadingthenovel.
31.Althoughhewasquiteyoung,hediditverywell.
Quiteyoungashewas,hediditverywell.
32.Shehadtosellherhouse.Thatwastheonlywayoutforher.
Shehadnochoicebuttosellherhouse.
33.Hewenttostudyatacollegeattheageof18.
Whenhewas18,hewenttostudyatacollege.
34.Whatsurprisedmegreatlywastofindshewassuchafineswimmer.
Tomygreatsurprise,Ifoundshewassuchafineswimmer.
35.“Mary,doyouagreewithme?”Johnasked.
JohnaskedMaryif/whethersheagreedwithhim.
36.Mybrotherhasbeeninthearmyforthreeyears.
Itisthreeyearssincemybrotherjoinedthearmy.
Mybrotherjoinedthearmythreeyearsago.
37.Shesaidtome,“Don’tforgettoringhimuptomorrowmorning.”
Shetoldmenottoforgettoringhimupthenextmorning.
38.Weleftearlysothatweshouldn’tbelateforthemeeting.
Westartedoutearlyinordernottobelateforthemeeting.
39.Lookroundbeforeyoucrothestreet.
Lookroundbefore/when/whilecrossingthestreet.
40.Workhardandyouwillsucceed.
Ifyouworkhard,youwillsucceed.
41.Shesuddenlybegantocry.
Sheburstintotears.
42.sheistooyoungtogotoschool.
Sheisn’toldenoughtogotoschool.
43.Itisnotpolitetomakeothersbelaughedat.
Itisnotpolitetomakefunofothers.
44.Mathildewouldrathernotgotothepalaceballunleshegotsomejewelry.
Mathildewouldratherstayathomethangotothepalaceballifshecouldn’tgetanyjewelry.
45.Itisbetterforyoutogiveupdrinking.
Youhadbettergiveupdrinking.
46.Itisnotnecessaryforyoutoworryabouthim.
Youneednotworryabouthim.
Thereisnoneedtoworryabouthim.
47.Ashewasverypoor,hecouldn’tgotocollege.
Hispovertypreventedhimfromgoingtocollege.
48.Theenemysoldier,whowasfulloffear,kepttrembling
Theenemysoldier,fulloffear,kepttrembling.
49.Hehasformedthehabitofsleepingearlyandgettingupearly.
Hehasmadeitaruletosleepearlyandgetupearly.
Hehasgotusedtosleepingearlyandgettingupearly.
50.WeoftenhearhersingEnglishsongsinhersparetime.
SheisoftenheardtosingEnglishsongsinhersparetime.
书面表达如何写出好句子
书面表达如何写出好句子？
评分标准为：
完全完成了试题规定的任务。
—覆盖所有内容要点。
—应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。
—语法结构和词汇方面有些错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。
—有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。
完全达到预期的写作目的。
以前高考书面表达评分主要是根据要点和语言准确程度而定，因此考生在书面表达时，也只注重不遗漏要点和正确使用语言知识（如谓语的时态、名词单复数等）这两个方面，很少考虑或根本不考虑“使用较复杂结构或较高词汇”，导致最后写出来的东西千篇一律，缺乏生气，影响了自己的成绩。
那么，考生怎样才能在书面表达中避免语句表达单一化，写出好的句子来呢？本文拟结合新的评分标准，对学生书面表达中的一些语句作一分析，并提出一些写作建议，以帮助考生写出丰富多彩的句子出来，提高自己的书面表达能力。
一、要适当地多使用一些词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采，丰富语句的表现力。如：
【原文】Shedoesn’tlikesports.
【修正】Shecaresnothingforsports.
【原文】Anewrailwayisbeingbuiltinmyhometown.
【修正】Anewrailwayisunderconstructioninmyhometown.
英语习语、词组十分丰富，考生在自己的书面表达中，能适当地使用这些短语，无疑是一个提高水平的十分行之有效的方法。
二、尽量避免过多地重复使用的某一单词，必要时应选择使用其它恰当的同义词或词组来代替。如：
【原文】Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherlikeswatchingtelevision.
【修正】Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherenjoyswatchingtelevision.
【原文】We’vebuiltanewclassroombuildingbesidestheoldoneandwe’vealsobuiltalibrarywheretheoldplaygroundusedtobe.
【修正】We’vebuiltanewclassroombuildingbesidestheoldoneandwe’vealsosetupalibrarywheretheoldplaygroundusedtobe.
三、要注意使用不同结构、不同长度的句子，尽量使句型多样化，避免单调。如：
【原文】Thereisanewclassroombuildingononesideoftheroad.Thereusedtobeaplaygroundontheothersidebefore.Butthereisalibrarynow.Thereareallkindsofbooks,newspapersandmagazinesinthelibrary.Thereisanewplaygroundinfrontoftheschool.Therearealotoftreesinandaroundtheschool.
【修正】Ononesideoftheroadthereisanewclassroombuilding.Ontheotherside,wheretheplaygroundusedtobe,nowstandsanothernewbuilding—ourlibrary,inwhichyoucanfindallkindsofbooks,newspapersandmagazines.Theplaygroundisnowinfrontoftheschool.Wehavealsoplantedalotoftreesinandaroundtheschool.
原文在语法上并没有什么错误，但由于通篇过多地使用了therebe结构，不但使得表达的内容显得单调乏味，而且还给阅卷老师一种“不成熟”的感觉。我们可通过转换句式来避免句子结构的单一化。同一个意思，可使用不同的表达方法，这样做既可以突出重点，又能丰富表达，增加文采。
四、多使用一些主从复合句来代替简单句，可使书面表达行文更加丰富多彩。如：
【原文】Wehadtogohome.
【修正】Allwecoulddowastogohome.
【原文】Themealwasverynice.Weallenjoyeditverymuch.
【修正】Themealwassonicethatweallenjoyeditverymuch.
【原文】IstudiedChinese,maths,English,physics,chemistryandcomputeratschool.
【修正】ThemainsubjectsIstudiedatschoolincludedChinese,maths,English,physics,chemistryandcomputer.
五、改变句子开头方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再在句末加上一个状语。我们可以适当地把一些成分（如状语）提前位于句子的开头，使整个句子读起来有点跌宕起伏，增加书面表达的表现力。
【原文】Wemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogetherearlyinthemorning.
【修正】Earlyinthemorningwemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogether.
【原文】Theyoungmanpointedtoapolicemannotfarawayandsaid,“Hestoppedusanhouragoandtoldustocatchanotheroffender.”
【修正】Pointingtoapolicemannotfaraway,theyoungmanexplained,“Hestoppedusanhouragoandmadeuscatchanotheroffender.”
六、通过合句，将意义相关的几个句子用一定的连接方式连接起来，或通过紧缩，去掉一些多余的成分，避免冗长累赘、松散无力，以增强句子的连贯性，达到更好的表达效果。
如：
【原文】Wehadashortrest.Thenwebegantoplayhappily.Wesanganddanced.Sometoldstories.Someplayedchess.
【修正】Afterashortrest,wehadgreatfunsinginganddancing,tellingjokesandplayingchess.
原文并没有明显的语法错误，但读上去不够简洁，显得罗嗦。可把原若干简单句合并成带有一个共同主语的句子。又如：
【原文】NowZhangGeZhuangPrimarySchoolhasthreeteachers.Theyteach48pupils.
【修正】NowZhangGeZhuangPrimarySchoolhasthreeteachers,teaching48pupils.
【原文】MybrotherwasridingthebikeandIsatontheseatbehindhim.
【修正】Mybrotherwasridingthebikewithmesittingontheseatbehind.
七、在整篇文章众多的主谓宾句子结构中，可适当地打破常规，用一些倒装句、强调句或感叹句，为意思的表达增添一点新意。
【原句】Myparentspraisedthedogwarmly.Ithadsavedmylittlesisterbravely.
【修正】Myparentspraisedthedogwarmly.Itwasourbravedogwhohadsavedmylittlesister.
【原句】Theheadofthefarmshowedusaround.Weweregladtoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingverywell.
【修正】Theheadofthefarmshowedusaround.Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingsowell.
八、连接成分起着承上启下的作用，是语义关系过渡的桥梁。有效地使用语句间的连接成分，可使全文结构紧凑，层次清楚，过渡自然。如：
【原文】OnthemorningofFebruary8,2000,at7:15,IwasonmywayalongParkRoadtowardstheeast.IsawanoldmancomeoutoftheCityPark.AyellowcardroveupThirdStreet.Itsuddenlyturnedright.Ithittheoldman.Hefelldownwithacry.Thecardidn’tstoptosavetheoldman.Itranawayquickly.
【修正】Theaccidenthappenedat7:15onthemorningofFebruary8,2000.IwaswalkingalongParkRoadtowardstheeastwhenanelderlymancameoutoftheparkontheoppositesideofthestreet.ThenIsawayellowcardriveupThirdStreetandmakeasuddenrightturnintoParkRoad.Thenextmomentthecarhittheoldman.Hefelldownwithacry.Butthecardidn’tstoptosavetheoldman.Instead，itdroveoffatgreatspeed.
原文显得支离破碎、层次不明，通过运用一些连接成分或过渡词后，原结构松散的句子就有机地结合起来，变得上下连贯，浑然一体了。
最后，我们还要提醒考生，在使用比较复杂的句型和结构时，一定要注意分寸，应根据书面表达的内容和篇章结构而定，千万不要弄巧成拙。
原文刊登于《英语通高三版》2001.6.
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