托福句子改写

托福句子改写 | 楼主 | 2017-07-07 14:08:59 共有3个回复
  1. 1托福句子改写
  2. 2托福写作考试怎样避免句子过长
  3. 3托福写作句子美化

托福写作考试怎样避免句子过长,第一种方法是用一个单词代替一组意义相同的单词比如,校内道路不应当拥堵以便人们顺利通行,写作中的变性主要有三种改变前,我们除了真实善良和漂亮之外一无所有。

托福句子改写2017-07-07 14:07:53 | #1楼回目录

1.Theartist''''sworkpushesourcivilizationtoahigherlevel.

改进:Artists''''workupgradesourcivilization.

2.Forexample,youworkinabigfactory.

改进:Supposeyouworkinabigfactory.

3.You''''llfindyouarefitforbusineandyoucanmakeityourmainjob.

改进:You''''llfindthatyouarecutoutforbusineandyoucanmakeityourcareer.

4.Wewillownnothingatallifwedependonluck.

改进:Wewillgetnowhereifwerelyonluck.

5.Hewillgetahighersalarytoimprovehislivinglevel.

改进:Hewillgetahighersalary,thusimprovinghislife.

6.Theirbrainisstillveryyoung.

改进:Theyarestillimmature.

7.Dissatisfactionmakespeopleproducedesireforbetterthings.

改进:Dissatisfactionimpelspeopleforthebetter.

8.Theycan''''tanalyzeclearlywhatisrightandwhatiswrong.

改进:Theycannottellrightfromwrong.

9.Itwillhelpchildrentoformagoodhabitofdealingwithtime.

改进:Itwillhelpchildrenlearntomakegooduseoftime.

10.Thoughitisnotthebestjob,itaffordtohislife.

改进:Thoughitisnotthebestjob,ajobisajob.Hecanmakeendsmeetwithit.

11.Sincepeoplearealwaysnotsatisfiedwiththeirpresentsituation,theywantfurtherdevelopment.

改进:Sincepeopleareneversatisfiedwiththeirstatusquo,theywantfurtherdevelopment.

12.Theonlythingtheyneedtodoistofindajobwhichcaneasilygetbigmoney.

改进:Theonlythingtheyneedtodoistofindajobthatcanbringthembigmoney.

13.Theylikeanactivelifebutnotapeacefullife.

改进:Theylikeanactiveliferatherthanapeacefulone.

14.Somecigarettesmayevencostalargersumofmoney.

改进:Somecigarettesmaycostevenmore.

15.Firstly,dissatisfactionencouragesthediscoveryofnewproducts.

改进:Firstly,dissatisfactionencouragestheinventionofnewproducts.

16.Inordertosuittheneedsofenteringintowork,studentsmustgraspsometechnicalskills.

改进:Inordertomeettheneedsoffuturework,studentsmustlearnsomepracticalskills.

17.Itisverynecessarymorequalifiedscientistsandtechnicians.

改进:Qualifiedscientistsandtechniciansareingreatdemand.

18.Thisknowledgewillbecomeapartofyourbody.

改进:Thisknowledgewillbecomepartofyou.

19.Theycannotthinkclearly.

改进:Theycannotthinkstraight.

20.Moneycanimprovetheirlivingstandard.

改进:Moneycanimprovetheirlife.

21.Parentsalwaysthinkthatchildrenwillgetagoodjobandearnalotofmoney.

改进:Parentsalwaysexpecttheirchildrentogetagoodjobandearnalotofmoney.

22.Ifastudentonlycaresaboutmoney,willleadtobeunhappyallhislife.

改进:Ifastudentonlycaresaboutmoney,hewillbemisle

dandwillbeunhappyallhislife.

23.Onepurposeofeducationistostudythewayinwhichhestudieslater.

改进:Onepurposeofeducationistolearntolearn.

24.Manyparentsarrangetheirchildrengotolearnpiano.

改进:Manyparentssendtheirchildrentopianoclasses.

25.WhenIwanttoabsorbsomebodyelse''''sopinion,Iwillstudywithothers.

改进:WhenIneedsecondopinion,Iwillstudywithothers.

26.Eatingoutsidehasthemostadvantagethatwecangoatanytimewhenwefinisheatingwithoutdoinganywashing.

改进:Thebestpartofeatingoutisthatwecanleaveeverythingbehindaftermeal.

27.Smokingcanhelpyourelaxyourmind.

改进:Cigarettescanhelpyourelax.

28.What''''saboutnonsmokers?

改进:Whataboutnonsmokers?

29.Whynottobeanon-smoker?

改进:Whynotbeanon-smoker?

30.Everyonewillhavemanyfriendsinhislife.

改进:Everyonehasfriendsinhislife.

31.Iamnotgoodatmaths,butEnglish

改进:IamgoodnotatmathematicsbutatEnglish/MystrengthisnotmathematicsbutEnglish.

32.Whoistheproperpersontomakeuphismindsaboutchildren''''sleisuretime?

改进:Whoistheproperpersontoplanchildren''''sleisuretime?

33.Itischildrenwhoclearabouttheirinterests.

改进:Itischildrenwhoareclearabouttheirowninterests.

34.Iagreethelatteridea.

改进:Iagreewiththelatteridea.

35.Manypeopledissatisfywiththestatusquo.

改进:Manypeoplearedissatisfiedwiththestatusquo.

36.SoIfeelbreathemorecomfortablynow.

改进:SoIfeelmorecomfortablenowwhenIbreathe.

37.Peopleshouldlearnknowledgenomatterhowoldtheyare.

改进:Peopleshouldlearnnomatterhowoldtheyare/Peoplearenevertoooldtolearn.

38.Nooneknowsallthethings.

改进:Nooneknowseverything.

39.Iwanttoliveinaquietplacetoadmirepeacefullife.

改进:Iwanttoliveinaquietplacetoenjoypeacefullife.

40.Eachformofhavingfriendshasitsadvantages

改进:Eachwayofchoosingfriendshasitsadvantages.

41.Iwasadmittedtoakeyuniversityforwhichfewdaredtosignup.

改进:Iwasadmittedtoakeyuniversitytowhichfewdaredtoapply

42.Luckily,herecognizedanAmericanprofessor.

改进:Luckily,heknewanAmericanprofessor.

43.Theywilllearnthebadhabits.

改进:Theywilldevelopbadhabits.

http://www.oh100.com hiscontinuedprocess,peoplemakeprogress.

改进:Inthiscycle,peoplemakeprogress.

45.Lastly,highereducationisequaltohighersalary.

改进:Lastly,highereducationmeanshighersalary.

46.Bymakingfriendswhoaredifferentfromourselves,wecanmakeupfordeficiency.

改进:Bymakingfriendswhoaredifferentfromourselves,wecanmakeupforourshortcomings.

47.A

wrongdecisionwillbringevenworsefact.

改进:Awrongdecisionwillbringevenworseresult.

48.Youspendallyourlifetofulfillyourwilling.

改进:Youdevoteallyourlifetothefulfillmentofyourdream.

49.Childrenshouldbetaughtdisciplinesinordertoavoidunnecessarylost.

改进:Childrenshouldbetaughtdisciplineinordertoavoidunnecessaryloss.

50.Ifeltalone.

改进:Ifeltlonely.

托福写作考试怎样避免句子过长2017-07-07 14:07:07 | #2楼回目录

托福写作考试怎样避免句子过长

根据国外学者的调查统计,托福写作考试中一个以句号结尾的英语句子,单词的数量最好不要超过20个,否则的话,句子偏长,听话人的注意力有可能不集中,漏听一、两个单词,从而影响对整个句子的理解。托福写作考试中为了避免句子冗长,通常采取两种办法,一种是将一个长句子,划分为几个短句子,每个短句子之间有语气上的停顿,让听话人有间歇的感觉,另外一种则是简化句子的单词构成,用一些简单的单词,代替一些复杂的单词。下面我就给各位介绍三种常用的简化方法。

第一种方法是用一个单词代替一组意义相同的单词,比如:

①用forget(忘记)代替donotremember(没有记住)

②用ignore(忽视)代替donotpayattentionto(不注意)

③用now(现在)代替atthispointintime(此时此刻)

④用because(由于)代替duetothefactthat(鉴于下列事实)

第二种方法是省略同义词或近义词,比如在下面例句中,形容词important(重要的)和significant(有重要意义的),就是两个同义词(也可以说是近义词),我们可以省略important,只保留significant。

①Thegovernmentprojectisimportantandsignificant.(这项政府计划是重要的,有重要意义。)

②Thegovernmentprojectissignificant.(这项政府计划有重要意义。)

第三种方法是在不改变句子含义的前提下,省略所有可以省略的单词,比如在下面例句中,thecoverofthebook(书的封面)可以省略成thebookcover,isredincolor(是红色的)可以省略成isred。

①Thecoverofthebookisredincolor.(书的封面是红色的)

②Thebookcoverisred.(书的封面是红色的)

最后我们把这三种方法结合起来,将一个冗长、绕嘴的句子,改写成一个简短、易懂的句子。

①Universitymallsmustbeaccessibleandfreefromcongestioninorderthatstudents,facultyandemployeesmayhaveunobstructedpassagethroughthoseareasofthecampus.(校内道路必须是便于通行的,不拥堵的,以便让学生、教师和职员能够无阻碍地通过,到达校园的各处。)

②Universitymallsmustbefreeenoughfromcongestiontoallowpeopletowalkthrough

easily.(校内道路不应当拥堵,以便人们顺利通行。)

以上就是托福写作中避免句子过长的几个方法,希望对正在准备备考托福写作考试的考生们有帮助。

托福写作句子美化2017-07-07 14:06:41 | #3楼回目录

句子美化

A:状语前置

在英文写作里,状语前置是一种相当常用的句式变换手法。

状语前置就是把一个由副词、介词、现在分词或者动词不定式形成的小短语放在句首。这种句式最大的好处是让你的句子产生了一种长短结合的跳跃的节奏感。

新托福作文状语前置用法全集

☆Historically,inAmericaworkershavebeenmercilesslyexploitedbybigcorporations.Forexample,garmentindustryworkers,railwayworkersandfruitpickersweresufferingmanyhardshipsandpaidverylittle.

☆Clearly,thisisapositivealternativeformotivatedparentsandtheirchildren.

☆Undoubtedly,themostbasicelementsofwritingaretobefoundinpictures.

B句中做手脚

☆同理,在新托福作文的句中也经常可以引入小短语,它会让句子显得更加灵活多变。

Shopping,anecessarypartofdailylife,isincreasinglytime-consuming(消耗时间的)inNorthAmerica.

We’IIalldieintheend,andbecauseofthis,weshouldcherisheverymomentoflife.InAmerica,thosewhomovelongdistancesaregenerallythekindofpeoplewhoplaythemajorroleinholdingthecommunitytogether,inlargepartbecause/partlybecausetheyaremoreconfidentandhavebettercareeropportunities.

Theinternetisasimplecollectionofscreens改成

☆TheInternetis,simply,acollectionofscreensofinformation(knownaswebpages)thatresideonthousandsofcomputersaroundtheworld.

☆Apositiveattitude,afterall,isessentialforastudent’sacademicperformance.

☆Uponreflection,Irecognize,sadly,myexperienceofbeingahigh-schoolstudentandthoseofthehigh-schoolstudentstodayarenotasdifferentasIhoped.

☆Manyscientistsbelievethathumanactivityhasverylittle,ifany,impactontherecentwarmingtrendonEarth.

C副词领路人

有些表示幅度或者范围的副词,如果放在形容词的前面引导形容词,经常可以起到让它们后面的形容词更加明确的作用。

例如:TheabilitytospeakEnglishisincreasinglyimportantinaglobalsociety.

Themedicinedoesn’tcuretheillness.It

merely(just)stopsthepain.

Theproduct’ssuccecan’tbesolely(-only,但注意solely只能作副词)attributedtotheadvertising.

类似的副词还有:approximately(大约),markedly(显著地),substantially(大幅度地,显著地,在比较正式的文章和演讲中异常常用),considerably(显著地,可观地),slightly微小地,marginallyc略微地,和fractionally本意是分数地,但一般就近似“微小程度地”意思。

D倒装是进步的阶梯

倒装这种语法现象同学们都学过,但经常想不到去积极使用。在新托福作文里如果找准机会用一次,会让考官感到一股暖流涌上心头。

☆Notonlyshouldtheparentsspendmoretimewiththeirchildren,theyshouldalsotrytocommunicatewiththeirchildrenmore

often.

☆Onlyinthiswaycantheproblemofchildobesitybeeffectivelycontrolled.

☆Undernocircumstancesshouldteacherspunishtheirstudentsphysically.

☆Strangeasitmayseem,parents’attentionsometimeshinders(阻碍)students’academicprogress.

☆近义词:hinder/impede/obstruct

☆Neitherofthesefactorsisthecaseanylonger.

☆NeverhavetherebeenmoreappropriatevehiclesfordirectmarketingthantheInternetandE-mails.

E强调但不强势

用Itis…that..或者Itis…who…

Parentsandsiblingshaveafargreaterimpactonthedevelopmentoftheirpersonalitytraits.

Thoughfriendsdefinitelyplayasignificantroleinshapingteenagers’personality,itistheparentsandsiblingsthathaveafargreaterimpactonthedevelopmentoftheirpersonalitytraits.

F虚拟不等忽悠

TherecentcrisiscouldnothaveoccurredwithouttheparticipationofthebiggestplayersonWallStreet.

HadIlivedinasmalltown,mylifewouldhavebeenconfinedto(被限制)veryfewpossibilities.

G抽象画法的of

Importance/help/value/interest/significance/necessity/quality等。比如:

☆Fossilfuelisofgreatimportancetothe

developmentofindustry,transportationandtourism.

☆Whetherpeopleinthedevelopingworldaresufferingisofnointeresttomanywealthycitizensinindustrialcountries.

H被动也疯狂

Itcanbearguedthat…

Ithasbeennotedthat…

It’sobservedthat..

It’sbelievedthat…

It’scommonlyacceptedthat…

It’sgenerallyrecognizedthat…

Itisreportedthat..(注意这里可以用现在时)It’sestimatedthat…

I变性表决心

请注意这里的变性是指“改变词性”的句式变换手法。写作中的变性主要有三种:改变前:Peopleareconcernedbecausethetraditionalvaluesaregraduallydisappearing

fromthetribes.

Peopleareconcernedaboutthegradualdisappearanceofthetraditionaltribalvalues.

改变前:Somepeopledon’tfulfilltheirresponsibilitiesasparents.

改变后:Somepeopledon’tfulfilltheirparentalresponsibilities.

Telecommuting(在家远程上班)canbringnumerousbenefitstobothemployeesandemployers.

Bothemployeesandemployerscanbenefitfromtelecommuting.

Telecommutingcanbenefitemployersandemployees.

Telecommutingisbeneficialtobothemployeesandemployers.

Bothemployeesandemployerscanbebeneficiaries(受益者)oftelecommuting.

J副词排成队

☆Athletestendtomovegracefully,energeticallyandpowerfully.

Somepeoplearguethatthenewinstructionmethodologycanhelpstudentsdevelopintellectuallyandemotionally.

☆Allthismaterialisnowquickly,inexpensivelyandreadilyavailablefromthecomfortofourdesksandworkstations.

☆Afterthesurgery,mostyoungpatientsfeelphysicallyandmentallybacktonormalwithinaweek.

M双重否定就是肯定

☆1tisnotunrealistictopromotemorejobsatisfactioninanyjob.意思是:去做某事是

现实的

☆Notsurprisingly,

Itisnotuncommonthat

Itwasnotunusualthat

三、托福句库必备排比法

1.词语排比

(1)名词

Wehavenothingbuttruth,goodneandbeauty.

我们除了真实、善良和漂亮之外,一无所有。Shegaveupherfamily,herhonor,andherfortuneforliberty.

她放弃了家庭、荣耀和财富,只是为了追求自由。

用family,honor,fortune:比来突出她对自由的渴望以及毅然为之所做出的牺牲非常大。

(2)动词

Sincenow,wemustpickourselvesup,dustourselvesoff,andprepareourselvesfornew

challenges.

从现在开始,我们必须重新振作,整装待发,迎接新的挑战。

三个简单的动词“重新振作、整装待发、迎接挑战”,却能够有力地号召大家为当前的工作做好准备,起到鼓舞人心的作用。Duringourlife,weshouldneverstopstudying,thinking,andpracticing.

在我们的一生中,我们必须不断学习,不断思考,不断实践。

用三个动词精炼、抽象地概括了人一生不断成长的过程,道出了人生的本质。

(3)形容词

Whatanugly,greedy,andselfishman!

这是一个多么丑陋、贪婪,自私的人呀!连用三个形容词塑造了一个丑陋的形象,也流露出了作者的厌恶之情。

Skateboardingisbothexcitinganddangerous.

滑板运动又兴奋又危险。

(4)副词

Intheyallcame,oneafteranother,someshyly,someboldly,somegracefully,someawkwardly…(Dickens)

他们都进来了,一个接着一个,有的害羞,有的胆大,有的优雅,有的笨拙(狄更斯)

2.短语排比

(1)名词短语

Fourthingsarenottobebroughtback:awordspoken,anarrowdischarged,thedivinedecreeandpasttime.(E.P.)

四件事情是无法收回来的:说出去的话,放出去的箭,神圣的法会,以及过去的时间。

Onlydependonthosevaluescanwesucceed–hardworkandtolerance,fairplayandcourage…

我们要成功,就需要依靠以下这些价值观:努力工作和忍耐力,公平竞争和勇气

(2)动词短语

Leteverynationknow,whetheritwishesuswellorill,thatweshallpayanyprice,bearanyburden,meetanyhardship,supportanyfriend,opposeanyfoetoassurethesurvivalandsucceofliberty.(Kennedy)

(3)介词短语

Ourgovernmentisagovernmentofthepeople,bythepeopleandforthepeople.我们的政府是民有、民主、民享的政府。

(5)不定式短语

Thetimehascometorelearnourhistory,toreaffirmourresponsibilityandtochooseournewtarget.

是到了重新学习历史、重新确认责任、选择我们新的目标的时刻了。

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Itiseasierformorepeoplenow

thaninthepasttogetaneducation.

文章1

Neverdoesthetopicreferringtoeducationfailtoarousetheattentionofpublic,withtheincreasingawareneoftheimportanceofeducationaswellasthegrowingamountofeducationalresources.Imaintainthatpeoplearenoweasiertobecomeeducatedthaninthepast.

Firstofall,educationallevelofacountryisconsideredasavitalfactortoacountry' http://www.oh100.com ernmentalsoprovidesteacherswithexcellent

http://www.oh100.com ernmentalso

equipsuniversitiesorcollegeswithhighqualityfacilitiestoencourageteachersandstudentstogetinvolvedinallkindsofresearches.Therefore,withthehelpof

government,educationhasbecomeeasierformostpeople.

What’smore,variousopenclassesandlearningmaterialsareavailableonthe

internetsothatpeoplecanlearnwheneverorwherevertheywant.Theyneednottogotoschooltogeteducation.Asauniversitystudent,Icanbenefitalotfromthesharedonlineeducationalmaterials.Forexample,IamabletohaveaccetotheclassesthatareofferedinHarvardUniversity,StanfordUniversityandotherfamousuniversitiesallovertheworld.Ireallyenjoytheconveniencethatinternethasbroughttous.Therefore,Ibelievethatpeoplehavemoreopportunitiestogeteducationwiththehelpofinternet.

Lastbutnotleast,theawareneofeducationhasincreaseddramaticallyinmodernsociety,andthereasonsmaybethatastrong

educationalbackgroundisbeneficialtoallofus.Underaheavyinfluenceofglobal

unemploymentcrisis,mostpeoplefindthatitishardtofindajob.However,apersonwithmasterdegreemaypossemorechancestogetanidealjob.Inaword,thepressureoflivinginmodernsocietyalsoservesasanimportantmotivationthatstimulatespeopletobecomeeducated.

Allinall,withthehelpofgovernmentandthewidespreadofinternetaswellasincreasingawareneofeducation,itissurlyeasierforpeopletobecomeeducatedthaninthepast.

文章2

Thetwentiethandtwenty-firstcenturieshaveseen/witnessedthedevelopmentand

http://www.oh100.com cationisanareathathasdevelopedtremendouslyinthepasthundredyears.Theriseofthemiddleclass,thestandardizationofeducation,andtheopeningofmanymoreschoolshasmadeitpossibleformorepeoplenowthaninthepasttogetaneducation.

InChinaspecifically,educationreformbeganwiththeopeningupandreformperiodofthe1980’s.DuringthistimeChinaalsoopenedupitseconomyandchangedfromastateruneconomytoamarketeconomy.AmarketeconomyinChinahasmadeitpossibleforthedevelopmentofthemiddleclass.Historicallythroughouttheworld,educationbelongedtothesocialelites.Peoplefromthelowerclass,whichalwaysoutnumberedtheupperclass,didnothavethemoneyorresourcestobecomeeducated.Themiddleclaisagroupofpeoplewhoarenotnecessarilytheelitesof

society,buthavethemoneytopayforeducation.Sincethe1980’s,themiddleclahasbeenrapidlygrowing,increasingten-fold十倍thenumberofchildrenwhohavetheopportunitiestogetaneducation.

Withtheriseofthemiddleclass,alsocomesanincreaseinpressureonthegovernment.倒装Sincemorepeoplecanaffordeducation,morepressureisputonthegovernmenttoprovideteachersandschoolsforthechildrenofthemiddleclass.Thegovernmentisthenspurredintoactiontoincreasefundingandresourcesforeducationnationwide.Thishasthenpromptedtheopeningofschoolsinmanyareasbeyondthemajorcitiesandthetrainingofmanynewteachers.Moreteachersandmoreschoolsmeanthatmorepeoplewillbeeducated.

Thegovernment’sattentiononeducationhashelpedwiththestandardizationofeducationinChina.Thisstandardizationhascreatednationwideteststhathavemadeitsothateverystudent,nomatterhisorherbackgroundorhometown,hastheopportunitytoattendhighschoolandapplyforcollege.Notonlydomorestudentshavetheopportunitytoattendschool,buttheyalsohavetheopportunitytocontinuetheireducationfurtherthanpreviousgenerations.

Theriseofthemiddleclass,theincreasedinvolvementofthegovernment,andthestandardizationofeducationhasmadeitsothatmorepeople,nowthanever,havetheopportunitytobecomeeducated.

范文

Ithasbeenarguedthatdespitethecontinuedadvancementofscienceandtechnology,ourliveshavechangedinawaythatismoretremendousthanever.I,howeverIdisagree.

First,environmentalproblemsarestillonthewaitinglist.Technology-dominatedindustrializationhasgeneratedsuchproblemsasglobalwarming,acidrainandurbansmog,whichhasgivenrisetoaseriesofadverseeffects-climatechange,deathofaquaticlifeandrespiratorydiseases.Althoughqualityoflifehasimproved,therearestillmanythingsthatcouldbeimprovedinChina,likesafetyandlivingconditions.Ifthemostsignificanttransformationinlivingstandardshastakenplace,howisitpossiblethatecocideisstillarealandever-presentdanger?

Second,worldpeacestillhangsbyathread.TaketheIraqWarforexample.Itbrokeout

eightyearsagoandsincethenIraqishavebeenlivinginhell.Theirhomesaretorchedanddestroyedandtheirfamilieshavebeentornapart.Itiscertainthattheyhavenotreceivedallthebenefitsofadvancedtechnology.Superpowersarebusywiththenuclearexperiments,butthehighlytechnologicalworkbringsanythingbutworldpeace.Ifthemostsignificanttransformationinlivingstandardhastakenplace,howisitpossiblethatsomeonthisplanetarestillingreatagony?

Lastly,thepaceoflifeisincreasinglyfasterandshowsnosignofslowingdown.Undoubtedly,developmentinITindustriesandcommunicationdeviceshasenabledpeopletoenjoymoreconvenientlives.However,itisalsotheseeminglyalmightytechnologiesthathaveputpeopleinsuffering.Whereveryougo,cellphonesmakeitpossibleforyourbotospotyouandgiveyoumore

work, http://www.oh100.com puters,whichgivecompaniestheabilitytoteleconferenceandconductonlineinterviews,haveturnedourhomesintoamereextensionofouroffices.Ifthemostsignificanttransformationinlivingstandardshastakenplace,howisitpossiblethatpeoplenowarestillsufferingfromdeprivedsleep,unbalanceddietandstrainedfamilyrelations?

Allinall,scienceandtechnologyhavebeenandwillcontinuetodevelop,butthefundamentaltransformationofourliveshasnotyettakenplace.(363words)

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