写作时要用简洁明了的语言避免不必要的词语，如果一个句子中包含两个或两个以上独立分句要用连接词连接，高考英语作文写作基椽英语写作中句子的表达，显然把句子写连贯这是指写几句话又叫句群来说的。
写作训练一_写句子
一、避免误置修饰语：
误置修饰语是一个用作修饰语的词或词组，因为没有靠近它所修饰的词，结果使意义模糊不清或改变了句子的意思。
*修改下面的句子，注意误置修饰语的错误。
1AttheageofsixmyfatherbegantoteachmeEnglish.
2Ialmostgotgoodmarksineverysubject.
3Indespairwecouldimaginewhatanordinarymanwoulddo.
4Thegirlismyfriendwhomyoumetatthepartyyesterday.
5Themoneywasputintheboxwhichfathergaveme.
6Youwillenjoylookingatthepicturesthatyoutookyearslater.
7Therewasaspotonhernewdrethatcouldnotberemoved.
8Sheputthesandwichesbackinthebagthatshehadnoteaten.
9WithloveandcareIrealizedmyparentsraisedmethebestwaytheycould.
10Isawthatthemurdererhadbeencaughtintheeveningpaper.
二、逻辑主语一致问题：
注意分词、动名词、不定式及某些形容词短语的逻辑主语应与句子的主语一致。*修改以下句子：
1Comingoutoftheclassroom,myheartwasbeatingveryfast.
2Lookingdownthevalley,smokecameup.
3Tobewell-informed,readingnewspapersisagoodhabit.
4Lyingthereonthebeachinthesun,schoolworkdidn’tseemimportant.
5Soundasleepinthelivingroom,Icameacromygrandfather.
6Whentenyearsold,mymothergavemearing.
7Apologeticallythefoodwasplacebeforeus.
8Becauseofgoingtotoomanyparties,mytermpaperwaslate.
9Tooexcitedtoeat,theletterwasreadoverandover.
10Readytostart,thebuswasinfrontofthebuildingwaitingforus.
11Dressedinblue,motherthoughtthelittlegirllookedprettier.
三、避免人称代词的混淆：
整篇文章宜使用固定的代词，以第一人称叙述的文章不能转成第二人称。用第三人称叙述的文章就不能转用第一或第二人称。
*修改下面用错的代词：
1Beforeoperatingthemachine,oneshouldreaddirectionscarefully.Otherwiseyoumayhave
anexplosion.
2Veryfewpeoplecangetasmuchenjoymentoutofmodernartastheycould.Oneneednotbe
anartisttogetsomefunoutofpainting.Nordoyouneedtobeveryartistic.
3Wehadbeenontheplanetforeighteenhours,andyougetprettytiredofsittingthatlong.
四、避免冗长累赘：
写作时要用简洁明了的语言，避免不必要的词语。
*将下列句子用简洁的语言表述：
1PersonallyIthinkheisagoodstudent.
2Shehelpedtheoldmantositdowninthearmchair.
3IseldomgototheShanghaiLibraryduetothereasonthatitisfarawayfrommyhome.
4Ihaveletimethanmyfellowworkers,forIamthedaughterofmymotherwhoisseventy
andinpoorhealthandthemotherofmylittleson.
5Iimmediatelysenthimoutofthehousetohospital.
五、正确使用连接词，表示较为复杂的意思：
如果一个句子中包含两个或两个以上独立分句，要用连接词连接。不要把nevertheless,however,therefore等副词误认为连接词用。
*用合适的连接词把下面每一题中的两句话连起来：
1Springhascome.Everythingiscomingbacktolife.
2Iwantedtorun.Whereto?
3IsawMr.Smithtalkingwithsomeofthestudentsintheroom.Ididn’tenter.
4Takethemapwithyou.Youwillbelost.
5Heheardaloudnoiseinthehallway.Herushedout.
6Youwillgothere.Theywillcomehere.
7Themandidaverygoodrepairjob.Hechargedverylittle.
8Ididn’twritetohim.Ididn’tcallhim.
9Sheisfamousforherpaintings.Sheisfamousforhernovels,too.
10Itmusthaverainedlastnight.Thegroundiswetinthemorning.
11Thechildwassick.Hedidn’tgotoschool.
12GivethebooktoTom.Youmayreaditfirst.
六、尽量避免汉语干扰造成的错误
*根据汉语意思修改句子：
1Thebooksinourlibraryaregettingmoreandmore.（书越来越多）
2Shedidnotjoininthegame.Evenshedidnotspeaktoanyofthem.（甚至她…）
3Weveryappreciatetheirkindness.（非常感谢）
4Anyonewhogoesagainstthelawcannotescapefrombeingpunished.（任何人…都不）
5Nomatterhow,Iwilldomybestintheexam.（不管怎样）
6Sothatwemustmakegreateffortstodoourworkwell.（因此）
7Ialmostcouldnotmovewithsomanyclotheson.（几乎动弹不得）
8Thereisayoungmanwantstoseeyoudownstairs.（有人要…）
9Manyfamilieshaveonlyonechild.（许多…只有一个…）
10Ourteacherwasgladthatwealmostpassedtheexam.（差不多全部）
11DuringstayinginBeijing,Ivisitedalotofplacesofinterest.（在…期间）
12Iwonderhowoldherageis.（她年纪有多大）
13Facedwithsomanygoods,Ididn’tknowwhattobuy.（不知买什么）
14MothermademenotwatchanyTVforlong.（不让我看电视）
151617181920212223242526272829303132Iwillnotforgetmydearfriendsforever.（永远不忘记）Wearealwaysnotlateforclass.（总不）Wecouldnotfindthemissingboyeverywhere.（到处都不）Thatnovelisveryworthreading.（很值得）InShanghaiweenjoyconvenienttraffic.（便利的交通）Sheaskedmehowmuchthepriceofthevasewas.（价格多少）Hisillnedoesn’tmatter.（不要紧）Weknowthatthemooncirclesroundtheearth.（围绕着…转）Inmyopinion,Ithinkweshouldaskthemforadvice.（以我看，我认为）Istillcontactwithmychildhoodfriendsnow.（和…联系）Theywillcometovisityouwhenyouareconvenient.（你方便的时候）Iwillreadbooksasmuchaspossibleduringtheholiday.（尽可能多）Thisyearmystudieswillbeverybusy.（学校很忙）Hesaidhehadabusystudyinglifeatschool.（繁忙的学习生活）Ididn’tknowhowIshoulddo.（该怎么办）Facedwithsomanystrangers,Iwasn’tabletoexpress.（不会表达）Itookanactivepartinmystudies.（积极参加学习）Hesaidthathemaybewouldcomebacknextweek.（他可能会）
2016高考英语写作讲解与训练--作文写作基础(写作中句子的表达)
高考英语作文写作基椽—英语写作中句子的表达
一.教学内容：
英语写作中句子的表达
高考英语书面表达要求内容充实，句式丰富，用词准确，行文连贯，思路清晰，过渡自然。要想达到这一目的，句子的正确运用和表达是至关重要的。高考书面表达不仅要求学生正确运用语法规则，即结构完整，主谓一致，时态、语态准确，还要有效的使用并列、转折、递进、因果、比较等表达方式，同时“运用较多的语法结构和词汇”进行表达。
［学习过程］
一.句子的基本结构和表达方式
1.简单句
Earlyinthemorning,wesetoutattheschoolgate.
TheInternetisbecomingmoreandmoreimportantinourdailylife.
MuchofCanadaiscoveredbyforests,butinChinatheareaofforestismuchless.
Wecansende-mailsanywhereatanytimeandgetthelatestinformationthroughInternet.
2.复合句
（1）状语从句
Thecarhitthemanwhenhewascrossingthestreet.（时间）
Assoonaswegottothecampsite,westartedtoputupthetentandcookfood.
WhereverIam,Iwillbethinkingofyou.（地点）
Shetooksomebookswithhersothatshewouldgetboredduringthelongjourney.（目的）Aslongaswedon’tloseheart,wewillfindawaytoovercomethedifficulty.（条件）Althoughitisdifficult,wewilltryourbesttofinishitontime.(让步)
（2）定语从句
YuanLongping,whoisapioneerofagriculture，iscalled“thefatherofrice”.
WechoseBeijingWorldParkasourdestination,whichliesinFengtaiinthesouthwestofBeijing.
（3）名词性从句
Wherewearegoingthisweekendhasn’tbeendecided.(主语从句)
Myideaisthatweshouldsticktoouroriginalplan.（表语从句）
Thefactthattheearthisseriouslypollutediswell-known.（同位语从句）
Idon’tknowwhetherTomwillcometothepartytonight（宾语从句）
（4）非谓语动词
Surroundedbyavarietyofbuildings,wefoundourselvesdeeplyabsorbedinthesight.
Welefttheparkfeelingjoyful.
HavinggraduatedfromSouthwestAgricultureCollegein1953,hedevotedtofindingwaystogrowmorerice.
Itisunnecessarytoarguewithhimaboutit.
Thebookexplainshowtosolvetheproblem.
3．固定搭配的结构
Itwasthisparkthatwasfullofhistoryandfun.（强调结构）
AsthedestinationislocatedinFengtaiinthesouthwestofBeijing,wehadtospendonehourandahalfgettingtherebybus.Uponarrival,wevisitedLincolnMemorial.
WewenttoBeijingWorldPark,whichliesinFengtaiinthesouthwestofBeijing,inordertoseetheworld-famousarchitecture.
YuanLongpingisknownasapioneerofagriculture.
Walkingthroughtheparkwasafeastfortheeyes.
Thewholeworldcouldbenefitfromhiswork.
Hisgreatcontributiontoagricultureisofgreatimportance..
Insteadofbeingsatisfiedwithhiswork,hewasdrivenbyastrongdesiretocontinuetodevelophisrice.
Forhisgreatachievement,hewashonoredbyChinesegovernment.
二.英文写作中常见错误句型分析
1.粘连句
Beijingisabeautifulcity,Ienjoylivinghere.
2.句子结构不完整
Therearemanypeopleagreetokeeppetsathome.
Althoughpetsmaypollutetheenvironment.
3.不平衡结构
Thenewhouseislarge,beautifulandhasenoughroomsforpeopletolivein.
Thereisagreatdifferentbetweendiningoutandtohaveasnackathome.
4.悬空修饰
ComparingwithZhongguancun,SiliconValleyisfarmoredeveloped.
Tofinishthetaskperfectly,morepracticeshouldbedoneahead.
5．汉语式英语
WhowillinsteadofMiGreen?
Weallagainstallkindsofterroristsactivities.
Therewere20peoplediedinthecaraccident.
Don’tworry.Yourbodywillgetwellsoon.
Iwasverygladtohearfromherletter.
Thefilmhadbegunfor5minuteswhenIgottothetheatre.
Thewesternpartofthecityrainedheavilyyesterdayevening.
Ourschoolhavetakenplacegreatchanges.
WelcomeyoutovisitBeijing.
三.写作中常用的句型结构
1.Heworkedveryhardinordertoachievehisgoal.
2.Havingwalkedthewholeday,weweresotiredthatwecoulddonothingbutsleep.
3.Nomatterwhatproblemhefaces,henevergivesup.
4.Itistoolongajourneytomakeinonedaybycar.
5.You’dbetterstartbyintroducingyourself.
6.Tompreferstostayuplatetofinishtheworkratherthanleaveitdonethenextday.
7.Forestscannotonlyfreshtheairbutalsoreducenoises.
8.YoucouldeitherbuyanMP3orgotoYunnanforavisitifyoupatheexam.
9.Heissuchaboringmanthathelikesneitherentertainmentnorlearning.
10.Footballaswellascomputergamesispopularwithyoungpeople.
11.Everyoneisbusyintheclassroom.Somearereading,othersarewriting.
12.Beijinghasapopulationof13million,makingitoneofthelargestcitiesinChina.
13.Thedistancefromeasttowestisover5,500kilometersandthecountrycovers6oftheworld’s24timezones.
14.Ididn’tknowthetruthuntilshetoldmewhathadhappened.
15.Itisnogoodtalkingwithoutthinkingcarefully.
16.Peoplefinditimportanttohavesomeworkingexperience.
17.ItistenyearssinceImethimlasttime.
18.Itwon’tbelongbeforewegraduatefromthisschool.
19.ItisconvenientforustobeabletogetlotsofinformationthroughInternet.
20.Ittookusquitesometimetocollectsomuchinformation.
21.It’stimeforustoleavethepark.
22.Itisfriendshipthatwevaluemost.
23.Itistimethatwedidsomethingtoprotecttheenvironment.
24.Theybelieveittheirdutytohelpthoseinneed.
25.Itissaidthatmorechanceswillbegiventothestudents.
26.ItisknowntoallthatChinaisacountrywithalonghistory.
27.Asisknowntoall,the29thOlympicGameswillbeheldinBeijingin2016.
28.Whatexcitedmemostgreatlywasthatmynovelhadbeenpublished.
29.Thereisabeautifulgirllivinginthesmallvillageatthefootofthemountain.
30.ThereasonwhyIwaslatewasthatIcaughtinthetrafficjamthismorning.
31.Thereusedtobealibrary,butnowithasbeentorndown.
32.Thereisnodoubtwhetherheisfitforthejob.
33.Tomygreatsurprise,hemanagedtocompletethetaskonlyinacoupleofdays.
34.Ihadarolloffilmdevelopedlastweek.
35.Thankstoourefforts,everythingisgoingsmoothly.
36.I’mnotsurewhenIsawherlast.
37.Butfortherain,weshouldhavehadapleasantjourney.
38.Iwasabouttogooutwhenthetelephonerang.
39.Somepeoplewastefoodwhileothersdon’thaveenough.
40.Hewassotiredthathefellasleepwithhisshoeson.
41.Onceyouarehere,listentoyourteacher’sinstructions.
42.ThepopulationinandaroundSanFranciscoisnowtentimesmorethanitwasin1906.
43.ThemoreyoupracticeEnglish,theeasieritbecomes.
44.TheChinesedietisconsideredtobethehealthiestintheworld.
http://www.oh100.com lephonesplayanimportantroleinourdailylife.
46.Besideshisworkinphysics,hespentalotoftimeworkingforhumanrightsandprogress.
47.Insteadofgoingtothebank,theywilluseacomputerandatelephonetochangemoneyandtopaytheirelectricitybillsandsoon.
48.Thatisbecausethisprofessorhasdiseasewhichpreventshimfromspeaking.
49.Althoughmanyfamiliesbecameseparated,peoplestillkeptintouchwitheachother.
50.ChinaDailyhasallusualsectionsofnewspaper,includingHomeNews,InternationalNews,BusineNewsandSportsnews.
写作训练：学会把句子写连贯
写作训练：学会把句子写连贯
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写作训练：学会把句子写连贯
连贯，也可以说成“联贯”，即句子之间连接贯通。显然，把句子写连贯，这是指写几句话（又叫“句群”）来说的。翻开同学们的作文本，段落中上下句不连贯的现象是比较普遍存在的，主要表现在：句子之间无顺序，承接不紧密，跨度大；上下句之间，被描述的对象（即“主语”）重复出现，不会运用“他（她）”，或者“它”这些人称代词。
怎样才能做到把句子写连贯呢？
（1）合理安排顺序，使句子连贯。有顺序，这是写几句意思连贯的话的最基本的要求。这就要求我们在写几句话时，一定不能东一句、西一句，想到哪儿就写到哪儿；总要围绕既定的中心意思，按照一定的顺序，把相关的句子组织在一起，使句子前后连贯。如：按照事情发展的先后顺序排列句子；按照时间先后的次序排列句子；按照空间位置换（上→下、下→上，里→外、外→内，前→后、后→前，左→右、右→左，近→远、远→近，??）顺序排列句子；按照事物的不同类别或同一事物的不同方面的顺序排列句子；按照“总→分”或“分→总”的顺序排列句子；按照“概括→具体”或“具体→概括”的顺序排列句子；按照“因→果”或“果→因”的顺序排列句子；??当然有时候还可以把两种或几种“顺序”综合起来使用。
大家读读下面这几句话，想想是按什么顺序排列的：雨越下越大。我透过玻璃窗向外望去，天地间像挂着无比宽大的珠帘，迷蒙蒙的一片。雨落在对面屋顶的瓦片上，溅起一朵朵水花，像一层薄烟笼罩在屋顶上。雨水顺着房檐流下来，开始像断了线的珠子，渐渐地连成一条线。地上的水越来越多，汇合成一条条小溪。这几句话，先“总”写雨大，再具体“分述”雨怎样大，大到什么程度。在具体“分述”时，又是按照“天地间→对面屋顶→房檐→地上”的顺序排列的。这几句话写得多么清楚、连贯啊！
（2）学会运用“他（她）”或“它”这些人称代词，使句子连贯。读读下面这几句话，想想有什么毛病，怎样说才好：妈妈的衣袖破了。妈妈赶忙从抽屉里拿出一个小布包。妈妈先从布包里拿出一根针，一条青线，用牙咬了咬
线头儿，把线头儿穿过针眼儿。妈妈又从布包里找出一小块布，贴在破了的地方，然后一针一线地缝起来。
读后，大家一定发现：这几句话写的对象是妈妈，主要写的是妈妈缝补衣服时所做的准备工作，是按事情经过的先后顺序排列的。只是由于这四句话的开头重复出现“妈妈”一词，因此读起来显得很拗口。如果把后面三句开头中的“妈妈”改成“她”字，这几句话就连贯多了。这就告诉我们：在几个句子里，如果写的只是一个人物（或事物），后面再指这个人物（或事物）时，就可以用“他（她）”或“它”来代替。
【思考练习】
（1）句子连贯指的是什么？怎样写几句意思连贯的话？
（2）围绕“雪越下越大”（或“洗手帕”、“刷鞋”）这一内容，写几句意思连贯的话。